27.9.11

New Employers

Medieval Houses by stevecadman
Her first impression of Alane Gylmyn was not promising. He was a tall, thin man with a shock of black hair falling into a white face with two wide, staring eyes—almost comical—and a drooping chin. He looked alarmed to see a pretty young woman standing on his doorstep, looking up at him with a nervous, but obviously determined, face.

“May I see Madam Gylmyn, please?”

“Why, why, yes of course. May, may I get your name please?”

“Alyssum Bourne, from Saltersgate.”

“Saltersgate, you say. You’ve come quite a long way then?”

“Yes, sir, I have. May I hitch my horse?”

“Of course, yes, please let me help you.”

Cecily smiled for the first time in days as the awkward young man took Grane’s reins from her hand and led him away, leaving her to go inside alone.

The house was pleasant, whitewashed, simple. Though this was presumably the home of a “fallen” family, it was far and away more modern than Cecily had ever seen, even in Granton Castle. A small fireplace was set into one corner of the room with a tidy row of ornaments gracing the mantle and a neat little fire burning away inside. The simple chairs, doors, and tables were all immaculate, the rugs on the well-swept floor had been painstakingly straightened, and even the shafts of sunlight shining through spotless windows had the decency to be an impeccable white. This room, and presumably all rooms beyond and above it, was utterly irreproachable, trim, and orderly. Cecily ran her finger along the top of a tiny side table and wondered why this family needed a maid, when she looked up to see that a gray figure had silently appeared in the room.

“Good morning. Are you here to answer for the position?”

Cecily locked her quivering legs and got out the words, “I am here to apply for work as a maid.”

The woman was obviously a close relation to the man who had opened the door, they had both been painted with the same unflinching brush. This person (whom Cecily would soon learn to call Muire) was spare of frame, very pale, and dressed in the most efficient manner possible. She sat down in one of the hard wooden chairs and gestured for Cecily to take a seat. What followed was a battery of questions, delivered in a clipped and decisive manner, that made the cottager girl from Whitcrowe squirm helplessly in her seat.

When the interview ended Cecily remained seated, looking at Muire’s bowed head as the woman scribbled something on a thin sheet of paper, silent as the grave. Finally, she raised her ashy eyes to Cecily’s face and folded the paper, running her fingernail down the fold so that it flattened in a perfect half. “I will have to see what Mother has to say.”

As soon as the words left her mouth a door opened to reveal a dark hallway beyond, and the figure of a bent little woman. This woman was also thin and white, but with the tiniest spark of color in her crinkly cheeks; she walked with the aid of a gnarled stick, but it didn’t seem to inhibit her movement much because she hobbled rapidly over to Cecily as soon as she saw her and leaned in close with her bird-like face. “So this is our new maid, Muire? Quite pretty, isn’t she, I wouldn’t have believed it. Didn’t think God made girls like that nowadays. So pleased to meet you dearie, what did you say your name was?”

“I, I didn’t. It’s Alyssum—”

“Ah, alyssum. That’s the sort of flower you put in rockeries isn’t it? Lovely name dear, our garden used to be bursting with alyssum, that is until Muire pulled it all up and put in those dreadful weedy things.”

Muire Gylmyn looked like a candle wick that’s just been doused with cold water, practically dripping with outraged self-importance and all but glaring at her mother from behind lowered lashes. Cecily felt like congratulating the garrulous old woman.

Soon Cecily was ensconced in a rather more comfortable chair and sipping strong black tea while Madam G rambled along, relating the entire family history back to the time of the Campaigns. Muire had gone to visit some ailing relative, Alane was curled up in a corner with a book half the size of a horse, and a third sibling, Deirdre, sat across from Cecily with a half-finished quilt in her lap. Deirdre was slightly plumper than the rest of her family, but came equipped with some of her sister’s clean practicality. There had been another sister, Cecily soon learned, a woman named Eithne who had made a very nice match about a month ago and then gone away to raise chickens in the Fornaway Islands. 


Medieval Houses, a photo by stevecadman on Flickr.

25.9.11

Music and Writing

I love listening to music when I write. In fact, music is what stimulated much of my creativity for the plot of Beast and Beauty. When I'm cleaning, walking, or sitting in front of an unfinished manuscript, music--especially movie soundtracks--get my mind moving in unconventional ways. I have a playlist that I set to shuffle, and if a song with winsome strings and a heartsick melody comes up then I'll contemplate a scene that involves those same feelings in my characters. If the next track is rhythmic with a pounding bass that anticipates danger then I'll turn my thoughts to an especially frightening or perilous scene. Music helps me feel what my characters are feeling, and get inside their hearts and heads to discover what the circumstances are that make them act the way they do.

Here is a tiny sampling of some of my favorite "inspirational" songs. They have helped shape my story and I am forever grateful to the marvelous composers. Maybe they'll spark something in your creativity as well!




8.9.11

A Dialogue Dilemma

women talk by hans s
I've been having a rough time trying to decide how to write realistic, believable dialogue for my "medieval" fantasy characters. I wonder if I should make their language archaic and flowery, or more palatable to the modern ear. I don't want to sound pedantic, but am afraid that if the words coming out of my characters' mouths are too modern, it will seem anachronistic. I'm not sure that I'm capable of writing absolutely "authentic" dialogue, anyway!

For example, how do I get the point across in this passage of dialogue, staying true to the setting but also using vocabulary that is readable?

   “Cessy, are you happy here?”

   “I think so.”

   “You don’t sound very sure.”

   “Perhaps it’s because I’m not really sure what happiness is. Is it adventure? Is it greatness? Is it meaning? Is it love? Is it contentment? Is it wonder? Is it skill? Is it a little bit of everything? How can I tell if I’m happy if I hardly know the meaning of the word?”

   Alis gave a low, husky laugh. “I’m afraid that there isn’t a set definition, dearie. It’s different for everyone. I was happy with your father, happier than I had any right to be, but he would have driven another woman half mad with all his quirks and follies. That was my happiness—my home, my friends, my daughter. Your happiness may be very different indeed.”

I asked a fellow authoress her opinion of my predicament. Betsy St. Amant from the Scribble Chicks blog says this:

This is a tough one. The same rule sort of applies here as to dialect, such as someone who speaks with a strong southern accent, or any accent, etc. You don't want the dialect to be so strong and in every sentence so the reader gets frustrated and puts the book down. The way experts advise handling that is to introduce that character with a slightly strong first sentence. Then the next scene, tone it down to maybe two or three dialect words. Then from then on, only one per scene or so. Enough to remind the reader of their accent so they can "hear it" without bombarding them with it to the point of having to wade through dialogue.  
Your question is similiar though not identical. Could the same rule somehow apply to your situation? Maybe start a little archaic and flowery, and immeidately tone it down and keep it subtle as the novel progresses? If you set it up the way you want it, then you can trust your reader to continue to "hear it" and understand as they go.  
This is probably going to be a trial and error type of situation. I'd recommend trying what I suggested and having a reader or friend give you their honest opinion as to how it flows.Also, think about what YOU like - because you're a reader too. When you read a medieval fantasy novel, do you like reading poetic dialogue that might take you longer to comprehend but is true to the times? Or would you rather get on with the story?


What fantastic advice! I'll try my best to implement it.

What is your opinion of this dilemma?


women talk, a photo by hans s on Flickr.